SAT写作6分范文之finding happiness

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Prompt:

“During a biology class on metamorphosis, a teacher showed her class a series of pictures. The first was of a caterpillar. The next was of the caterpillar forming a chrysalis. The last was of a beautiful monarch butterfly emerging from its cocoon. One student was so impressed by this that he wrote in his notebook: ‘beautiful things can come from unpromising beginnings.’”--Susan B. Anthony

Assignment:

Do you think that people are capable of finding happiness or are they always searching for something beyond what they have? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.

Sample Essay - Score of 6

When I look at Jared, my adopted brother, I remember the first time I met him. I think about the beginning of our relationship, which was pretty bad, and how it led to the great relationship we have today. The development of the love between Jared and me is a great example of an unpromising beginning that led to powerful positive results.

Jared was a foster child for most of his life. For various reasons, like alcoholism and drug abuse, his mother and father couldn’t take care of him and his two brothers. Since he was small, he had been bounced from foster home to foster home, and it had obviously exacted a toll from him. He wasn’t very friendly with anyone, and it was apparent that he didn’t trust anyone. Because his home life was never stable, Jared hadn’t done well in school over the years. He was a young teenager on the edge of disaster.

All of that started to turn around when jared came to live with us. My parents decided to become foster parents because they love children and want to help them when they’re in trouble. They have four kids of their own, but they said they have more love to share. Jared was the first foster child they welcomed into our home. He was angry a lot of the time, walking around with a scowl on his face. I am closest to him in age, so my parents wanted us to be buddies. I wasn’t eager to make the effort, but one day my father explained that a lot of Jared’s unhappiness stemmed from his unstable family situation. Jared hadn’t grown up with parents who were there for him-he had grown up moving from one stranger’s home to the next. Once I realized that, I decided to try harder to befriend Jared. Little by little, Jared and I connected and became friends. I don’t want to give the impression that this was fast or easy. It wasn’t. But we did it.

Today Jared and I hang out a lot. Even though he’s a year older than I, he is in some of the same classes as I am because he has to make up some subjects he missed. We are also both on the basketball team. I really love being with Jared and I love him. We are now more than just friends; we are brothers. Our unpromising beginning has ended up in a relationship that makes us both better, happier people.